For this one girl

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Spontaner Track, viele rechtschreibfehler (noch nicht korrigiert) und leider noch ohne refrain...

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For this one girl

Theres a girl, I love her for years,
I got pain and I cry many tears.
I love her, but she treats me like shit.
But I love her so I make the best of it.
She had many boos when I was there,
I tried that it seems like I dont care,
But I did I was hurt in my heart,
Yeah I did and was hurt in my proud!

But theres still love in me for her,
It seems like in my heart there's a sherd.
I kissed her, felt her body, she wanted me.
She made me horny only with her I wanted to be.
She wanted me to give it to her right away,
She wanted me inside of her, wanted me to stay,
I wanted to give it to her but I was afraid,
It was my very first time - that's what I said

Now I dont know if theres another chance
In my heart deeply inside there is a lance
I don't know if I will have her again
To be a wuss it is all to do what i can?
In my heart, in my soul there's a mix
What'll be the next out of your bag of tricks?
All im wanin is to be with this one girl
Perhaps it's destiny, y'r my one, y'r my pearl!

I know there are other girls all over
But the first time I saw her there was an arc-over
This one girl is the girl of my life
She is the one to keep me alife
I'm her bondservant, I'm her slave
Shes my everything she's all i crave
Shes all im wanin till I'm in hell or in heaven,
I will be after her 24-7!

Oh no she's not like everybody else
How she moves, how she laughs and how she smells
I want to be all time by her side
To be close to her, that's what I ever tried
I still love her she's all what I want
She is of my love of my life the font
Like any phrase in this song up to my one
This last phrase's devoted to her and im still alone

Oh no it isn't the last phrase of this text
After every phrase one time there'll be the next
Now i'm on the phone, with her, with my one
But it seems like I'm on the phone alone
Oh, there 'ts empty, all inside of me
Yeah I'm empty it's my destiny to be
Now i think 'bout her and cry again many tears
I remember all the bad and the good years

The years I was always after her
The years in 'em she didn't care
She treated and still treats me like a toy
And not like a her-lovin' boy

Edit:
post scriptum: Fehlen auch ein paar kommas, also es kommt auf die Betonung drauf an (gibts auch einen dicken Beat dazu, wer weiß vielleicht stell ich den track bald rein) und klar wären Wechselreime besser...
 
Jetzt mal ganz drastisch, schuldigung im Voraus.


Das ist ja ein so dermaßen beschissenes Englisch, Junge!!! :mad:
 
Tja bei einigen Sätzen hab ich mir auch an den Kopf gegriffen und gedacht was hab ich da gemacht aber sonst hätte es sich nicht gereimt... Und weil es ein Spontanes Ding ist und nicht durchgearbeitet habe ich halt noch keine Fehler ausgemerzt...
 
Jo, das Englisch ist wirklich an manchen Ecken nicht das beste, aber der vorletzte Part gefällt mir sehr gut!
 
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